"Annie's song ain't great,
But it does something to Bob --
Mostly makes him feel sad."
That's six syllables! I fixed it.
Separately, I encountered an odd situation when I started writing up haiku based on songs that Dylan performed by other people with whom the songs are closely associated. Should I say that the water that stoned Van Morrison in "And It Stoned Me?" stoned Van in the haiku? Not necessarily, I concluded. I wrote these haiku because Bob Dylan stamped them with his own rendition. Therefore, the water stoned Bob -- even if he didn't get it himself from the mountain stream.
totally brilliant. keep them coming
ReplyDelete